A definite strength of the Paintball essay was how the author made a strong argument on his view of the activity. He explains how paintballing builds a stronger sense of positive teamwork and how it also provides as a healthy activity for anyone. The author describes how the cooperation and communication within the team builds a positive environment for every player involved. While he argues that this is important, he also claims that this activity can release a lot of stress and is popular with many people in the business world. Because there is no physical contact between players, he argues that paintballing is very safe as long as the players are wearing the appropriate equiptment such as safety goggles.
One of the weaknesses I thought of while reading the paper was how he opened with such violent descriptions when he was trying to argue that paintballing is not as violent as many people claim it is. Then, at the end of the essay, the author tells us that he DOES think paintballing is "violent to a degree" (406). Although I thought the author made a very good argument, it was not limited to just black and white, but he included a lot of the gray areas as well.
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